Well not here anyway. XXX Hot HD There was no build-up and no flow. 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-05-12 06:16:48To the person who commented on my previous comment. I never said anything about the spelling or grammar of the story. 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-05-12 06:16:48To the person who commented on my previous comment. Yes you’re right i don’t submit stories. Cya Later:)
Thel20anonymous readerReport 2013-05-10 10:58:11I’m not going to say it was bad but i will say that you really need to start proof reading. So like i said really work on your writing and proof read it be for posting. 8 comments«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-05-12 06:16:48To the person who commented on my previous comment. Also sex scenes need to be expanded and have more detail, describe it more, say what there bodies look like, how the’re feeling that sort of thing, The thing with her friend was kind of
