Also, shouldn’t there be a kind of lead-up to the whole kidnap thing because it is kind of a plonk in the middle of a street and get raped. Other than that, I really enjoyed it. Hot xxx 18 The structure was diffucult to read. Other than that, I really enjoyed it. You need some paragraphs and more story flow.anonymous readerReport 2011-02-04 20:35:16Not much dialoge. . . . . . …«1» I suggest paragraphs, and better dialogue structuring could help the readed wuite a bit. Other than that, I really enjoyed it. 5 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-12-25 17:19:55Decent story, but there are several quite obvious spelling mistakes, the structure of the writing is sloppy and the story doesn’t quite flow as it seems to jump from one bit to another, like you got bored of writing that part and moved on…anyway maybe you should get someone else to read it as it could
