I agree with those people… The poor form relegates this story to ash heap of shitty porn stories.READERReport 2004-07-16 04:38:29i think that that story was a bit too forward and un-natural, and yeah, i agree, needs more deatil.READERReport 2004-07-15 17:22:23I thought this story was OK. XXX Hot HD 3/10 only because you wrote a story and were able to separate your thoughts into paragraphs. The spelling and grammar are an insult to my intelligence. Who enjoys watching grainy quality pornos ? So why should we be subjected to stories that are so poorly constructed? Maybe a wee bit too short and it needs a little more detail.«1» Maybe a wee bit too short and it needs a little more detail.«1» 4 comments«1»READERReport 2004-07-17 23:39:27Where is the elaboration? 4 comments«1»READERReport 2004-07-17 23:39:27Where is the elaboration? I agree with those people… This story did nothing for me.
