Other than that it was decent at best.READERReport 2006-06-14 16:23:14I think this story is all right for a first time writer. please make the story longer and get into the acts slower to get the suspense going first.READERReport 2006-06-11 05:38:30to short but really good, needs to be more descriptive… Hot xxx 18 10 comments«12»READERReport 2006-10-05 20:36:285/10…you would’ve gotten a whole ten but you screwed up by placing ‘@’ instead of just spelling out the word…and it needed more details. please make the story longer and get into the acts slower to get the suspense going first.READERReport 2006-06-11 05:38:30to short but really good, needs to be more descriptive… please make the story longer and get into the acts slower to get the suspense going first.READERReport 2006-06-11 05:38:30to short but really good, needs to be more descriptive… Other than that it was decent at best.READERReport 2006-06-14 16:23:14I think this story is all
