Snowleopard makes a good point, and don’t forget that it’s a good idea to have someone else read your work before you post it. You screwed up this part so bad that I will not read it anyway. Hot xxx Keep going. Snowleopard makes a good point, and don’t forget that it’s a good idea to have someone else read your work before you post it. Keep up the good work, and with practice, you can be one of this site’s best writers. Hugh_Jardonanonymous readerReport 2012-04-16 20:30:24Good story, but needs some work on the spelling/grammar front. I second the emotion of ending a sentence with a period, not a camma. You screwed up this part so bad that I will not read it anyway.
