Flicking back and forth between character perspectives only makes sense if there’s something between the parts to distinguish them…at one point you switched from her to him and I had to read it twice to understand that you’d gone back to him telling the story…I doesn’t have to be much, just a couple extra line spaces, or a small heading; nothing that would detract from the flow of the story.«1» 1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-01 04:49:02I liked the first 4 chapters…they had potential…but this one killed that off. Hot xxx 1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-01 04:49:02I liked the first 4 chapters…they had potential…but this one killed that off. 1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-01 04:49:02I liked the first 4 chapters…they had potential…but this one killed that off. 1 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-01 04:49:02I liked the first 4 chapters…they had potential…but this one killed that off.
