On the other hand, you’ve mentioned that this is a true story… XXX Hot Video Overall, not bad for a first submission. But it would be easier to read with a blank line after each paragraph. A member of your family?!? The basic premise is a bit off for a supposed “true story” as well. But it would be easier to read with a blank line after each paragraph. It’s not quite wall of text, you did break it up after the first long paragraph. 2 comments«1»Ovid58Report 2012-11-12 06:07:23I didn’t vote, since I don’t want to spoil your ranking – anyway, please be more careful – just as the anonymous reader has already said, you switch between third person and first person in a way that really makes things hard to follow…
